I Need some feedback for my article

[linuxaria]

Dear all,

I've just published an article about producing a DVD slideshow under Linux.
I could use the community help to review the article, my first language is not english, so perhaps (or better PROBABLY) i've made some mistake.

So if you have some time and want to give me an hand, can you take the time to read this : How to make a DVD slideshow Linux article and let me know if tehre is something not clear enough in my explanation (or some error)

And if you like..don't be shy and give me a nice vote

Thanks !!

L.

[GregBrannon]

I like your writing style, the article has lots of good info in it, and a reader interested in the topic would read the article from start to finish and learn something useful from it.

I suggest:

Give it to a friend better at English to edit. You've done a passable job, but there are inaccuracies and difficult spots to read because of improper sentence structure and other grammar problems. Some readers will charge through the language problems. Others (like me) will become frustrated and find it difficult to finish the article.

Provide details on the environment you used to run the tools and the availability / compatibility of those tools in/to other environments. What dependencies might have to be satisfied to run those tools? What desktop environments are compatible? Etc.

Thanks for taking the time to share your experiences. Keep it up.

[linuxaria]

Thanks Greg.

I know about the english, trying to get the article proofread by someone at the moment :/

regarding the environment i use gentoo and ubunto 10.04, everything work on both system..but in Gentoo i had to fight a bit, but it's the usual for gentoo users

[hazel]

Here is a trial version in somewhat better English.

[linuxaria]

Thanks Hazel i love you.
Now i ust have to understand how (if it's possible) "patch" the article